Please edit the dissertation based on the comments of my supervisor below:
After reviewing your work, we are pleased with several aspects, including:
- The comprehensive use of theoretical frameworks (e.g., Strategic Trade Theory, Two-Level Game Theory, Institutional Theory),
- The integration of quantitative and qualitative methods,
- The relevance and timeliness of your policy analysis,
- The extensive and well-organized literature review.
However, to further strengthen the academic rigor and clarity of your work, we kindly suggest the following improvements:
Suggested Areas for Improvement
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1. Executive Summary / Abstract:
While comprehensive, the abstract can benefit from more precise metrics or quantification of findings for impact. Consider adding 1–2 lines with key empirical insights.
2. Chapter Structure:
The introduction is quite lengthy; consider trimming background details that are repeated later and focus more directly on the research gap and rationale.
3. Data Visualization:
Some of the charts/figures (e.g., Exports/Trade Flows) would benefit from clearer labels, source attribution, and more consistent formatting.
4. Hypothetical Scenario Framing:
Since this is a predictive study based on a “hypothetical 2025 Trump administration,” more emphasis should be placed on scenario-based assumptions and their limitations.
5. Conclusion:
The final chapter provides excellent recommendations, but it can be further strengthened by clearly aligning conclusions with your original research questions.
6. Language & Consistency:
While overall writing is strong, there are some areas with repetitive phrasing or long sentences that could be improved for clarity and flow.
Missing Sections:
- Student Declaration: Please add a signed declaration confirming the originality of the work.
- Acknowledgements: Consider including a brief section acknowledging support received from mentors, institutions, or collaborators.
Please consider these as final polishing suggestions before archiving or publication. Should you wish to revise these elements, you are welcome to resubmit an updated version.