Feedback from teacher-<\/p>\n
I can tell you tried so hard on this assignment, and I know you understand the material, but you overshot the mark. There’s just too much information here to evaluate it it n the context of an outline.<\/p>\n
Make sure you address each element clearly and succinctly, and carve out points not central to your thesis. This really should have been in an outline form, with 1-2 sentences per section. If you’d like some help, or want me to re-evaluate it after you’ve made some changes, let me know. Happy to help.<\/p>\n<\/div>\n
<\/p>\n Proficient – Develops an introduction with a thesis statement for the Final Paper. Minor details are missing.<\/p>\n <\/p>\n it is really hard to read and navigate through your introduction, although I do see that what you are addressing throughout. <\/p>\n <\/span><\/p>\n <\/p>\n Basic – Creates a limited outline of the major headings with a two- to three-sentence description of what will be discussed under each heading. Relevant details are missing.<\/p>\n <\/p>\n You have a lot of information in the body of this document. Not all of it is relevant, and I don’t see some key points, such as negligence \/ intentional tort \/ strict liability being discussed.<\/p>\n <\/span><\/p>\n <\/p>\n Basic – Provides a references page for the sources used in the Final Paper. One or two of the sources are unreliable or inappropriate, or fewer than five sources are provided.<\/p>\n <\/p>\n You have a number of sources, but they are not summarized, nor cited correctly. It’s hard to understand what you are using, and what is relevant.<\/p>\n <\/span><\/p>\n <\/p>\n Basic – Displays basic comprehension of syntax and mechanics, such as spelling and grammar. Written work contains a few errors which may slightly distract the reader.<\/p>\n <\/p>\n This is very hard to read because you’ve written 10 pages, single spaced, without a clear structure to it. It’s hard to read, and there is a lot of information here, not all of it relevant to the main point.<\/p>\n <\/span><\/p>\n <\/p>\n Basic – Exhibits limited knowledge of APA formatting throughout the paper. However, layout does not meet all APA requirements. <\/p>\n <\/p>\n You haven’t really followed APA formatting for this example. There needs to be a more formalized structure, double spacing, title page that conforms, etc.<\/p>\n <\/span><\/p>\n <\/p>\n Distinguished – The length of the paper is equivalent to the required number of correctly formatted pages. <\/p>\n <\/p>\n Clearly you have more than enough pages, but you’ve really overloaded.<\/p>\n <\/p>\n <\/p>\n <\/p>\n <\/p>\n Original Instructions-<\/p>\n Prior to beginning work on this assignment, review Chapters 1 through 7 and 11 through 14 of the textbook.<\/p>\n For your Final Paper, assume the following scenario: You are the manager of Acme Fireworks, a fireworks retailer who sells fireworks, and produces fireworks displays with ground display fireworks and large aerial display fireworks. The company started in the owner\u2019s garage 2 years ago and now has 15 employees who you manage. The company started as a sole proprietorship, and the owner has never changed the entity. The owner has informed you that the company has received inquiries from several large businesses wondering if the company could create several fireworks displays on a regular basis. The owner told the inquirers that the company could fill such display orders, and a price per display was agreed upon. It was discussed that most of the cost for a fireworks display is for skilled labor, insurance, and the actual service of setting off the fireworks. No other details were discussed. The owner is anticipating that new employees will need to be hired, but he is worried that if the large orders for fireworks displays do not continue, the company will not have the funds to pay the new employees. The owner is now considering changing the business entity, but he does not know what entity to form or how to form it.<\/p>\n In your paper, the owner has asked you to do the following:<\/p>\n For each task, be sure to analyze the relevant law, apply the facts to the law, and make a conclusion.<\/p>\n The Final Paper<\/p>\n( 0.76 \/ 1.00) Creates an Outline of the Major Headings With a Two- to Three-Sentence Description of What Will Be Discussed Under Each Heading<\/h3>\n
( 0.38 \/ 0.50) Provides a References Page for the Sources Used in the Final Paper<\/h3>\n
( 0.15 \/ 0.20) Written Communication: Control of Syntax and Mechanics<\/h3>\n
( 0.11 \/ 0.15) Written Communication: APA Formatting<\/h3>\n
( 0.15 \/ 0.15) Written Communication: Page Requirement<\/h3>\n
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