I receveid the following formative review for my essay:
This is an interesting discussion around health inequalities. The opening part considers the descriptive history of inequalities which is slightly on a tangent to the brief, but does place the inequalities discussion into context.
Also the discussion around what is parenteral nutrition is again slightly on a tangent to health inequalities, but the discussion around availability of services is quite well developed and the challenges of equal access and service for patients. More critical discussion of these challenges from both a service user and service provider would have enhanced the focus of this essay.
Always ensure any point you make is supported with a reference to prevent it being descriptive.
There is identification and utilisation of a range of appropriate literature, though greater critical evaluation of the basis on which authors draw their conclusions would have strengthened the discussion in places.
Some referencing inaccuracies eg et al should always be in italics
Mark range:50 – 59%
would be possible edit the essay following the above feedback?