The Negative Impact of Bullying on Children: Emotional, Physical, and Academic Consequences

The rough draft of my assignment,is complete, but I need to finalize it based on my professor’s feedback. Unfortunately, I lost 25 points specifically on the thesis. I received 0 on introductory. i have use all same sources that can’t change

This is a comment I received regarding the body & other comments 

“Paragraphs are generally competent, but ideas may show some inconsistency in organization and/or in their relationships to the thesis statement. Does not fully apply instructor feedback from previous assignments”

“Occasional mechanical errors are present. Language choice is generally appropriate. Varied sentence structure is attempted.”

“Sources are documented, as appropriate to assignment and style, although some formatting errors may be present.”

“Introduction omits beginning with a hook sentence, introduces topic, and ends with a thesis statement.”