The Metaphorical Landscape: Choice and Consequence in Hills Like White Elephants, Désirée’s Baby, and The Cask of Amontillado

rewrite of essay . For revision and future reference: Begin by revising your thesis. You can see my notes in your essay, but we want to focus on clarifying your issue, stance and universal truth so that you are a bit more aligned with answering the essay topic. Next look for places in some of your paragraphs where you can expand upon your great assertions. You want to be specific and sure every paragraph supports your thesis. By citing direct quotes from the text and adding more interpretation and analysis of those quotes you will create a great specificity which will support your thesis in your own voice. It may be that you add just a word or two. You can see my notes in your body paragraphs. You want to balance summary, analysis and interpretation to support your thesis and purpose. You want to focus on the key points in the summary to support your thesis. So that may involve trimming the summary and instead adding more direct quotes for a tighter analysis. In addition, always give your essay a once over to catch any comma errors and just do a quick last look to trim your essay of excess verbiage and redundancy; these may be simple things such as repetition or simplifying verb tenses such as “is running to runs. You can see my strikethroughs in your text. As a last note avoid the sub headings, but instead incorporate them into the paragraphs as we do in MLA stye.