Dear Writer,
I hope you’re doing well. I’m sending you my thesis titled “Optimizing Lean Supply Chain Strategies to Enhance Market Penetration for Admiral Self-Defense Sprays in the Benelux Region” along with my supervisor’s latest feedback. He has made it clear that several critical improvements must be addressed before final submission.
Below is a detailed breakdown of what needs to be fixed:
1. Justification of Case Study Selection
Supervisor’s comment:
“Take another critical look at your substantiation of the cases used. So far, it is not present. Why is Nike comparable to your organization? Why did you pick it? The same goes for the other 2 organizations used.”
Required Action:
- Add a full justification for why Nike, Amazon, and Unilever were selected as benchmark case studies.
- Explain what Lean concepts each case demonstrates (e.g., JIT, Agile logistics, Warehouse automation), and how these are transferable to Admiral’s context.
- Support this with academic literature on comparative case method and theory-based transferability.
- Refer to Chapter 5.2.4 Case Study Insights for this fix.
2. Rewrite of Conclusion Sections
Supervisor’s comment:
“Take another good look at how you write a conclusion please!”
Required Action:
- Review all conclusion-style paragraphs (especially in Chapters 5, 6, 7) and remove any generic summary phrases.
- Avoid informal language such as “in conclusion” or “this shows that…”. Instead, use academic phrasing tied to the findings (e.g., “This result confirms the applicability of XYZ under condition ABC…”).
- Do not include personal opinion or advisory tone.
3. Substantiate Recommendations (Chapter 8)
Supervisor’s comment:
“Your recommendations still deserve a lot of attention. Give advice that is applicable to the organization, no general theoretical ideas, with good substantiation, sources and calculations.”
Required Action:
- All five strategic recommendations in Chapter 8 must be rewritten to:
- Directly align with specific SRQs and findings from Chapter 6
- Include sources, KPIs, cost/benefit estimates, or references to Appendix E.8 or E.9 where applicable
- Be organization-specific (tailored to Admiral’s operations), not generic supply chain advice.
4. Improve Tables and Graphs
Supervisor’s implication:
Graphs and figures are mentioned but not clearly referenced or interpreted. Visuals should be meaningful and analytically integrated.
Required Action:
- Make sure every table and graph is:
- Properly numbered and titled (e.g., “Figure 6: JIT Impact on Lead Time”)
- Referenced and interpreted clearly in the body text
- Linked to specific arguments or findings
- Pay attention to Appendix references and ensure consistency across visuals and chapter citations.